After reading Christopher Burkett’s phobia draft, many significant elements, such as the beginning and rising actions, in addition to the climax, immediately became clear to me. The fear itself, isolophobia, was stated directly in the first line of his story, as well as a definition that provided the reader with some background knowledge. Burkett did not necessarily need to include this though, because his draft did a more than substantial job at explaining what isolophobia is and what it means to the character. For example, the character spoke about how he tried to get in contact with his significant other and failed, as he said “ I phoned her out of concern because she wasn’t answering my texts. Her phone went straight to voice mail. I figured…show more content… The assumption can be made that Frederick is in therapy due to his episode, which itself symbolizes the result of the climatic point. The story lacked in telling the reader what the future would be like for the main character. This is not necessarily a bad thing, and the reason why it is not shown is because of the cliffhanger at the end of the story. Fredrick’s voice ended with him saying to his therapist that “The nurses told me a few times that I was lucky to be alive after my binge drinking and that they had not seen a blood alcohol level to that extent and the person survived to tell the tale. I had thought that was my point, to drink away the pain of losing another person in my life, just like all the others before,” (paragraph seven.) The therapist inquired about that final statement, but was unable to get an answer. Burkett wrote from the therapists point of view: “by this point our time was nearly up and he just sat there and shrugged at my question and shut down,” (paragraph eight.) Although the reader did not get to see where Frederick would be heading from here, I feel like ending the story like this was a smart choice. In my opinion, it gives the story more depth because the reader finishes the story asking questions rather than having the answers given. My advice to my pen pal would be to not openly state what the destiny will be for his character if he decides to write about it further. Rather,
