Jacob Sanderson
3.07 Revise
Old:
So we will begin with the two families having dinner and drinking wine. Everyone is simply having a good time and enjoying each others company. You have the woman talking about their husbands and how they keep their houses clean and their husbands happy. While the men are talking about fights they have been in and jokes that are inappropriate to say around women. And then you have the children playing games eating sweets because they finished all their dinner. By now all the adults are now drunk and still drinking wine. And it is at this point that things start to go bad because Fortunato had insulted Montresor’s mother. She offered him a glass of wine that had been in the Montresor family for over 135 years. Fortunato said that the wine tasted like donkeys milk. Which is very disrespectful because people get milk from cows because they have the best milk and donkeys have very bad tasting milk. So it was a very disrespectful thing for him to do. New: So we will begin with the family eating the chicken and rice that was prepared by the Montresor family cook. Everyone is feeling happiness and enjoying each others presence. You have the woman talking about their husbands feeling happiness and joy and possibly pride in their husbands. While the men are talking about fights they have been in and showing scars and taking much pride in victory. And also feeling joy because they are telling jokes that they cant say around their
