Hi Alemtsehay,
I enjoyed reading your paper. You provided a vast amount of information about the community you assessed. The strongest parts of your paper were the great amount of detail you provided about the aspects you discussed, and the clear discussion of its strengths and weaknesses.
Although, there was a great and detailed amount of information at times the sentences were hard to follow, and paragraphs were not uniform throughout the paper. You did clearly discuss the strengths, weaknesses, and recommendations, but I was unsure of what you did not expect about the community or what really stood out to you.
To improve the paper I suggest re-wording some sentences and reformatting the paragraphs. I also recommend closely looking for
