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Overall, this essay had really clear, thorough explanation of what, how, and why Ryan persuades the audience. The thesis statement was very strong and clear about who the target audiences were, and what kind of strategies Ryan uses to persuade the audience better. The paragraphs had nice transitions between, so that the reader can understand why and how one kind of strategy work to persuade the audience. Additionally, the analysis part was very detailed and well supported by many examples from the speech; the explanations were easy to follow, and had lots of analysis part. But, there should be more connections among instructive strategy, alarming realities,