The writer was able to incorporate their evidence extremely well into their writing. It never felt like the evidence was planned, but it just blended in. For his/her main paragraphs the writer started off with a topic sentence, which previewed what the paragraph would be about then smoothly transitioned into the first piece of evidence. The writer also qualified the argument saying things like “The Walmart brand may be good, but the local brand is unbeatable” (Paragraph 2). By doing this the writer shows his/her understanding of the topic as a whole which strengths his/her logic and argument. After the writer had talked about the main point, he/she would bring in another source which relates to the preceding one. The writer also argues against the improper logic of one argument which helps prove her position more (paragraph 3). In this paragraph though, she breaks her style, and only uses one source instead of the usual two. To make up for this,…show more content… This is because the picture does not provide enough information or reasoning to strongly support an argument. By using the other sources grouped together in different categories, with similar sources in them like in the locavore essay, a strong essay would be able to be developed. A couple of the sources are also strong enough, and provide enough information to just have one paragraph about them like in the third paragraph of the locavore essay. There also could have been an introduction with this topic like in the locavore essay. Instead of describing a small town, however, an experience of using technology in schools could have been described. To judge the argument made in the source, a qualifying statement could have been used. It could say “this part is true” and explain the parts the agree with the writer’s argument, but then talk about something in the source that doesn’t agree with the
