Lately in the essays, especially the profile, I have definitely seen an improvement in my descriptions. For example, in my profile essay, “No fears,” I described my rabbi as he sat down. “Grant sat down about two feet away from me on the old wooden pew located in the back of his synagogue. His slightly wrinkled face beamed and shone with excitement and wisdom. He closed his brown and gentle, yet squinted eyes, running his calloused fingers through his slowly thinning hair. He opened his eyes and shifted his posture ever so slightly, resting in a more relaxed position in the pew.” As one can see, I have the ability to specifically show details and describe the scene effectively. The only concept I want to work on with that is weaving it throughout the entire essay, not just in certain