Personal Narrative: Improving My Work

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To improve in the sport of diving, I had to optimize how I performed my dives. After every dive, I thought about how I could have performed that dive better. Then, I try to make the correction during my next dive. This leads to constant improvement in my dives. Just like in diving, looking at my work and thinking about how I can make it better is required to improve my work and writing skills. Revising my work allows me to further develop my essays so that I can communicate my ideas as strongly and clearly as possible. For the next portfolio piece, I show how Mason's attempts to individualize himself in the film Boyhood actually leads him to conform to society in some way. While writing the essay, I struggled with not using vague pronouns and not using passive voice. I even had a sentence that used passive voice with a vague pronoun. Using passive voice led me to construct my argument with awkward sentence structure and awkward diction. The use of vague pronouns such as "it" or "this" as the subject of my sentences can confuse my …show more content…
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