My thesis merely stated my essay's goal, rather than giving a roadmap to guide the reader through my paper. My original thesis stated that “Diving into the exploration of how her role as a young mother affects how her followers respond to her persuasive tactics will give us insight into how she makes herself credible in the digital space.” I would now reword my thesis to say, “Cecily Bauchmann uses persuasive tactics in her social media posts to make herself seem more credible and relatable.” This restated thesis clearly states my position, which is assertive and arguable. In my rhetorical analysis, I also did a poor job of intertwining my thesis with evidence throughout the entirety of my paper. Since my thesis was not clear, my topic sentences lacked direction and purpose. This caused a disconnect between my evidence and my thesis. In a sentence, I stated, “Bauchmann uses this phrase to tell her followers that these specific supplements have improved her life, specifically in her abilities as a mother.” In this sentence, I did not tie my example back to my thesis, due to its lack of strength and